We’ve know for some time that this young man is a clever writer (actually he is clever at many things). This is his retelling of …
How Maui Slowed The Sun
Long ago Te Ra, the sun moved too quickly. So Maui thought of a plan. Soon after that, they cut some flax and they plaited it. They chanted the karakia. Then as quietly as a mouse they crept to where the sun rises. It was a very long way. As the sun begun to rise, they built a clay wall. As soon as the hot white teeth came up, they threw the ropes around the sun’s hot burning hair. Maui grabbed the magic jaw bone and smashed it on Te Ra’s head with all his might and then the sun went slower and they got all their work done in time.
Joshua
Age 6
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May 27th, 2010 at 9:11 am
The Rockets are very proud of Josh. We hope he writes more cool stories like that!
May 27th, 2010 at 9:49 am
Josh, your writing is absolutely amazing!! You have described the sun so well – I like the idea of the ‘hot white teeth’ and ‘burning hair’. I look forward to reading more of your wonderful work. Well done.
May 29th, 2010 at 10:11 am
I can’t believe that your story got on the school website
May 29th, 2010 at 10:59 am
WOW! Josh, this is a fabulous retelling of this legend! I like the part where you described how quietly they crept towards where Te Ra rose. Great job!
May 30th, 2010 at 3:15 pm
Well done Josh! A great story!
May 31st, 2010 at 3:22 pm
Hey Josh, This is a wonderful story. You have really brought this legend alive, and I can picture that poor sun getting slowed down so it can’t climb up in the sky. Great work!
June 2nd, 2010 at 7:27 pm
Dad- Wow Josh! Now thatsa fantastic story! I like the words that you have chosen to use to decribe Te Ra rising. Such as: “hot white teeth” and “the suns burning hair. When authors write creative stories, they do the same as you have done here.
Im very proud of you buddy and I think you should write many more stories. Hugs from Dad
June 3rd, 2010 at 3:26 pm
Look at all the great feedback you got Josh. I enjoyed hearing you read this to me. You made it sound even more exciting when you read it, but it is a great story. What will you be writing next?
David
July 23rd, 2010 at 7:54 pm
cool